Sunday, April 4, 2010

Change

No return…
The space grows wider.

Carried off

Into the night

Dreaming…

Aching and warm....

Tucked,
Into covers....

Alive.

2 comments:

  1. Simple and direct, this one works at an almost Imagist level. I would suggest one minor structural change: break line 3 one word sooner.

    One fun test for the integrity of a poem's structure involves reading the lines in reverse order, and that is the sole weak spot under that little test.

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  2. Thanks Andrew, I appreciate your letting me know. I will make the change... now.

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