Simple and direct, this one works at an almost Imagist level. I would suggest one minor structural change: break line 3 one word sooner.
One fun test for the integrity of a poem's structure involves reading the lines in reverse order, and that is the sole weak spot under that little test.
Simple and direct, this one works at an almost Imagist level. I would suggest one minor structural change: break line 3 one word sooner.
ReplyDeleteOne fun test for the integrity of a poem's structure involves reading the lines in reverse order, and that is the sole weak spot under that little test.
Thanks Andrew, I appreciate your letting me know. I will make the change... now.
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